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Continues from my last snippet of “Lily Wasn’t There” –Becca watches Lily work, and thinks the other woman is incredibly boring. A coworker asks if she’s finished with a file.

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“Almost.” Becca opened the folder on top of the stack on her desk. Ten minutes to get some caffeine in her, that’s all she needed to focus on the deadly boring numbers. She glanced at the gleaming pink metal clock on the corner of her desk. 9:14–almost three hours until lunch.

If she didn’t need the money so badly, she’d quit. But her daddy refused to help her financially anymore. So what if she’d lost three jobs in the year after she graduated?

 

“Lily Wasn’t There” is a short story I can’t quite get right. I’m hoping the feedback from WeWriWa will help.

Becca’s life hasn’t gone how she planned. Stuck in an accounting job she despises, she scrapes by with a paycheck that doesn’t buy her half of what she deserves. She wants to find a man before she’s thirty, get married, and never work another day in her life. While at work, she people-watches, and one particular coworker is often the focus of her attention–Lily. Lily is everything Becca hates–buttoned-up, bland, and overly dedicated to her job–or so Becca thinks.

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About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

13 responses »

  1. Cara Bristol says:

    I’m intrigued by this…a slacker at “work.”Would like to have read the blurb.

    I can empathize too, though. I’ve had boring jobs, where every second dripped by.

  2. Hmm. A bit spoiled, isn’t she?

  3. Makes me wonder what will happen next, interesting snippet!

  4. lol wonder what will happen to shake up her world?

  5. Debbie says:

    You’ve conveyed the drudgery of her job so well. Looking forward to the next instalment!

  6. You really bring through her personality through the events of the story. Clearly she doesn’t have the attitude towards work she’s going to need to really make it. She needs a little work in that department! We’ll see if she manages to hold down this job.

  7. Sarah W says:

    I love the premise. You’ve painted Becca’s personality with a few swift strokes—very nice!

  8. P.T. Wyant says:

    I’ve had jobs that boring! Very easy to relate to.

  9. Becca seems to be a very disturbed character but I’m curious about Lily.

  10. This is basically how most 20-something’s feel at one point or another after college, but Becca has a certain don’t-care attitude that sticks out even more. Very interesting look at her here.

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