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Continues from my last snippet of “Lily Wasn’t There” –Becca watches Lily work, while avoiding any work of her own. Last line: Becca and Vicki are talking about Becca’s date: “Can you believe he asked to split the check?”
“Really?” Vicki’s eyes widened.
She just loves to gossip. Got to be careful how much I tell her. “Yeah. His profile said he’s a doctor, so I thought he’d take me somewhere nice. Instead he picked this greasy diner and asked me to pay!” Becca half-listened to Vicki commiserating about the horrors of the dating scene as she thought about her wasted evening.
The doctor hadn’t been much in the looks department, either. She’d tried to be nice despite her disappointment, but he hadn’t appreciated her efforts.
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“Lily Wasn’t There” is a short story I can’t quite get right. I’m hoping the feedback from WeWriWa will help.
Becca’s life hasn’t gone how she planned. Stuck in an accounting job she despises, she scrapes by with a paycheck that doesn’t buy her half of what she deserves. She wants to find a man before she’s thirty, get married, and never work another day in her life. While at work, she people-watches, and one particular coworker is often the focus of her attention–Lily. Lily is everything Becca hates–buttoned-up, bland, and overly dedicated to her job–or so Becca thinks.