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Last lines: Becca is running down the stairs, late for lunch, and almost runs into a man with a toddler coming up the stairs. Becca: “Do I know you?”
“You’re one of Lily’s co-workers, right? I’m her husband, Jason, and this is Daniel.”
“Is he your second child?” Becca recalled the pictures taped to the wall above Lily’s desk.
“No, he’s my first,” he offered a polite smile, opened the door, and disappeared up the stairs.
How rude. Becca shoved her way through the crowd leaving the building. Later, when she was eating, she wondered why Jason had married Lily, instead of a prettier girl like Becca.
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“Lily Wasn’t There” is a short story I can’t quite get right. I’m hoping the feedback from WeWriWa will help.
Becca’s life hasn’t gone how she planned. Stuck in an accounting job she despises, she scrapes by with a paycheck that doesn’t buy her half of what she deserves. She wants to find a man before she’s thirty, get married, and never work another day in her life. While at work, she people-watches, and one particular coworker is often the focus of her attention–Lily. Lily is everything Becca hates–buttoned-up, bland, and overly dedicated to her job–or so Becca thinks.