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Last lines: Becca, out shopping, sees Lily, Lily’s husband Jason, child, and dog having a picnic.
Jason walked over to Lily and kissed her. Together they returned to the blanket, Lily winding in the kite as she walked, sat, and opened up the picnic basket.
That should be my life.
Becca tried harder—dyed her hair, spent an hour getting ready, wore colored contacts, worked out three times a week, tanned, and bought expensive clothes. Lily didn’t even have highlights in her black hair and she hardly wore any makeup.
Jason ran his hand down Lily’s shoulder and said something that made her laugh. She scooped up her toddler and perched him on her lap. They made a sickeningly perfect picture.
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“Lily Wasn’t There” is a short story I can’t quite get right. I’m hoping the feedback from WeWriWa will help.
Becca’s life hasn’t gone how she planned. Stuck in an accounting job she despises, she scrapes by with a paycheck that doesn’t buy her half of what she deserves. She wants to find a man before she’s thirty, get married, and never work another day in her life. While at work, she people-watches, and one particular coworker is often the focus of her attention–Lily. Lily is everything Becca hates–buttoned-up, bland, and overly dedicated to her job–or so Becca thinks.