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Last lines: Becca’s boss Mr. Williams calls her into his office, and says “Come in and close the door.”

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Becca sat in the high-backed leather chair, summoning an attentive smile.

“You’ve been with us for four years now, and recently, there’s been a marked decrease in your job performance. The Montemayors called yesterday and requested a different accountant.”

“I fell a little behind because of the complexity of the job, but I can still do it.”

“This isn’t the first time you’ve had complaints, Becca. We’ve discussed them, and for a time you showed improvement, but your record is inconsistent. I’m afraid I have to let you go.”

“What?”

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“Lily Wasn’t There” is a short story I can’t quite get right. I’m hoping the feedback from WeWriWa will help.

Becca’s life hasn’t gone how she planned. Stuck in an accounting job she despises, she scrapes by with a paycheck that doesn’t buy her half of what she deserves. She wants to find a man before she’s thirty, get married, and never work another day in her life. While at work, she people-watches, and one particular coworker is often the focus of her attention–Lily. Lily is everything Becca hates–buttoned-up, bland, and overly dedicated to her job–or so Becca thinks.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

26 responses »

  1. Gemma Parkes says:

    Oh no! Poor Becca, what’s next for her?

  2. Four years is too long. Consider changing the length of employment to way shorter time. That might work and knock some sense into her. She’s got to wake up. You’ll work it out.

    • caitlinstern says:

      I think I picked four years based on her age and the number of jobs I said (previously in the story) she had had in a certain amount of time.

      But I could certainly change that–I will look into it, thanks.

  3. What? She gets fired? Now I’m fuming. nice work!

  4. Oh! How is Becca going to be able to spy on Lily is she is fired? Damn she must really hate her life now.

  5. She clearly didn’t see that coming. You’ve established the setting so well…wonder what will happen next. Great 8!

  6. Millie Burns says:

    Yay, I’m happy now, she got fired! I can’t wait to see more of her reaction next week!!!

  7. Sarah Cass says:

    All that time obsessing about someone else took her attention away from her job…it serves her right! (and it’s what I expected the meeting to be)

  8. Sarah W says:

    I’m sure she hasn’t hit bottom yet, but it looks like she’s on her way! Couldn’t happen to a nicer person. Or probably wouldn’t happen, anyway…

  9. Debbie says:

    I’d say Becca got what she deserved! I’m sure she’ll survive, though. Would love to see the look on her face. 😀

  10. Aw man! Hopefully better things are in store, not out of the fry pan into the fire!!

  11. Nooo! Poor Becca! But maybe rock bottom will help turn her around 😉 Great 8!

  12. Evelyn Jules says:

    Uh-oh. Not entirely surprised, but I still feel a bit sorry for her (even though I think she deserved it). 😀 Can’t wait to see what’s next!

  13. historysleuth1 says:

    HA! The slacker got fired! Some how I see this as very bad for Lily the way Becca is so obsessed with her life. This just blew her jealously out of the water. Well done. It’s the perfect thing to have happen to ratchet the tension to the max. Lily better watch her back!
    History Sleuth’s Milk Carton Murders

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