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Last lines: Becca has just been fired, and Irving got the promotion she wanted, so she has a temper tantrum, kicking over his trashcan and pouring the coffee pot over his desk. A fire starts from the mess she made, which Lily puts out.

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“Everyone follow the evacuation plan!” The two security guards shoved Becca toward the stairs, through the mass of panicked employees. Annoyed at their manhandling, she tried to shrug them off.

I’ll be better off when I’m free of these idiotsI hate Albuquerque anyway; I’ll go somewhere else, maybe New York. 

The crowd jostled at her like sheep, tearing her away from the goons latched onto her, so Becca pushed her way through, toward to her car. A hand landed on her shoulder. “Get off of me, you-”

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“Lily Wasn’t There” is a short story I can’t quite get right. I’m hoping the feedback from WeWriWa will help.

Becca’s life hasn’t gone how she planned. Stuck in an accounting job she despises, she scrapes by with a paycheck that doesn’t buy her half of what she deserves. She wants to find a man before she’s thirty, get married, and never work another day in her life. While at work, she people-watches, and one particular coworker is often the focus of her attention–Lily. Lily is everything Becca hates–buttoned-up, bland, and overly dedicated to her job–or so Becca thinks.

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About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

6 responses »

  1. Hum, whose hand is that? Lily’s? Lily’s husband?

  2. Carrie-Anne says:

    Any problems she had in Alburquerque would just follow her to New York, if she doesn’t adjust her attitude!

  3. Sarah W says:

    I’m going to bet it’s Lily . . .

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