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This snippet is from my NaNoWriMo novel, Four Feet and a Badge, about a shape-shifting Narcotics detective.


“Hey, London,” one of the cops standing next to the damaged car, making sure the crowd stayed beyond the yellow tape, waved Detective Amy London over to him.

A few bored officers had gathered at the scene of the crime  because it had a sort of flair to it that was unusual. A one-woman wrecking-ball passed through the area on her way to freedom, breaking windows, knocking down fences, and destroying a wide variety of personal property, including the tan sedan the cop stood near.

Glancing at the clump of detectives and uniforms, London saw that her partner was still deep in conversation. In fact, Dale hadn’t glanced her way once, so London shrugged and strode over to the uniform.

As she walked, she studied the damage to the sedan. It wasn’t a lovely car, a sun-faded tan, and covered with dents and scratches from its miles of road. But the car was clean and well cared for, the only major damage showing from this morning.

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NOTE: I’ll be editing “Lily Wasn’t There,” and posting it on my blog for any of the curious.

In 1952, an event moved two and a half million people from one version of the Earth to another, a quarter of them Shifters (able to change their shape). It’s now 2015, and those people have married and had children. The Static (non-Shifters) fit in fine, but the Shifters often have to prove their worth.

London works in Seattle’s Narcotics Section, Shifting to four feet to sniff out drugs and chase down suspects. But she can be a little impulsive–like when she bit her previous partner, earning her a new one, strict, by-the-book Detective Janice Dale.

Dale tries to reign in her partner’s wilder behavior, not always with much success. And a new group of cocaine suppliers is muscling in on the city, and they’re leaving bodies behind. London and Dale will have to work through their differences to bring these dealers down, before the body count rises.


About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

22 responses »

  1. I wonder what’s going on with the car.

    • caitlinstern says:

      “A one-woman wrecking-ball […] destroy[ed] a wide variety of personal property, including the tan sedan…”

      Next snippet will explain how she did all that damage. 🙂

  2. To be continued, I do believe. You’ve piqued our curiousity with this eight.

  3. Gemma Parkes says:

    Fast paced, enjoyable snippet! I especially liked ‘a sun-faded tan’ as a description for the car.

  4. Eleri Stone says:

    Flows so nicely. I want to keep reading.

  5. An interesting snippet, fascinating premise for the world building!

  6. S.J. Maylee says:

    You’ve got my attention. More please. 🙂

  7. Kate Warren says:

    Nice set-up here. Lots of things that could happen. Looking forward to more!

  8. Sounds like an interesting world. (Maybe I’m old fashioned, but I think “a one-woman wrecking-ball had passed…” would work better. Parts of to be have legitimate uses.)

    • caitlinstern says:

      This is a rule I’m not sure about. I’ve read that you shouldn’t use ‘had’ a bunch in a row because it’s implied after the first one…

      But then again, it’s only twice. Hmm. I will consult my rule-books, thanks!

  9. Sarah W says:

    I like the snippet and the premise! I also like the term “Static”—very clever!

    • caitlinstern says:

      You have to have something, label-wise, right? And if you call them ‘normal’, that’s pretty insulting to the ‘non-normal.’

      My creative writing teacher would probably get a chuckle out of it, too. 🙂

  10. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love the scene you’ve created, particularly the description of the car.

  11. Great description. Very intriguing!

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