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An officer standing by a well-cared for, recently damaged old car calls Detective London over to him.


“Yeah?” She asked as she reached an easy conversational distance, stepping around the sprinkling of windshield glass sparkling on the asphalt.

The cop was one of those faintly familiar faces, with short brown hair, an open, friendly face, and hazel eyes. A quick glance at his nametag gave her his name, “Hey, Officer Fowler.”

“I was wondering, can you do something with this?” The officer held up a scrap of white cloth in an evidence bag. “She went that way less than ten ago. It’s killing my partner that we just missed her.”

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NOTE: I’ll be editing “Lily Wasn’t There,” and posting it on my blog for any of the curious.

Four Feet and a Badge is my NaNoWriMo story.

In 1952, an event moved two and a half million people from one version of the Earth to another, a quarter of them Shifters (able to change their shape). It’s now 2015, and those people have married and had children. The Static (non-Shifters) fit in fine, but the Shifters often have to prove their worth.

London works in Seattle’s Narcotics Section, Shifting to four feet to sniff out drugs and chase down suspects. But she can be a little impulsive–like when she bit her previous partner, earning her a new one, strict, by-the-book Detective Janice Dale.

Dale tries to reign in her partner’s wilder behavior, not always with much success. And a new group of cocaine suppliers is muscling in on the city, and they’re leaving bodies behind. London and Dale will have to work through their differences to bring these dealers down, before the body count rises.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

28 responses »

  1. chellecordero says:

    Just love the expression about the sprinkling of windshield glass, very good way to pull the reader into the setting.

  2. This is an interesting snippet I like that first line- an easy conversational distance- nicely worded.

  3. Gemma Parkes says:

    Great imagery and the plot thickens!

  4. MidnightPageTurners says:

    I have to agree, the sparkling on the asphalt part is beautiful imagery!

    • caitlinstern says:

      Glad you like it.
      I see car window glass in a parking lot sometimes, and it does catch the light in a pretty way. Even if it is basically just a mess that’s near impossible to clean up.

  5. Eleri Stone says:

    This flows so nicely. Definitely want to keep reading!

  6. She calls the cop Fowler and he doesn’t object. I’d expect him to correct her and say Officer Fowler or something professional. Hmm. Have I missed something here?

    • caitlinstern says:

      Nope. I refer to certain characters by their last names in the narration, and it leaked over into the dialogue.
      You’re totally right, I’ll add in his title in. Thanks for pointing it out!

  7. S.J. Maylee says:

    Fascinating. Love the descriptions you gave us. I’m curious what her response will be.

  8. Sarah W says:

    I really like this premise—she’s sort of a civilian K-9, then? Not ranked?

    I can’t tell at this point if Fowler is being (unintentionally) insensitive or not, and how she might react—can’t wait to find out!

    • caitlinstern says:

      She’s a Detective, actually. (See blurb below the snippet.) I think I got the idea from some cop shows that people just call each other by their last names.

      Maybe that’s wrong?

      “Detective London” is a lot to yell across a street, though. Hmm…

  9. Pavement makes for horrible tracking, but with a fresh scent…. But where did the scrp of fabric come from?

  10. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love your descriptive language, and how you gave Fowler hazel eyes. It’s a nice change of pace when a character has eyes that aren’t the usual brown, green, or blue.

  11. Kate Warren says:

    Great descriptions. Is Fowler asking her to shift, and sniff out whoever they missed by ten minutes? If so I hope it’s within police etiquette in the story world, otherwise he may end up in pain. 😉

  12. Definitely want to know what the response will be. Great 8!

  13. Evelyn Jules says:

    Awesome description, Caitlin! You really set the scene here and make the reader want to learn more. Great work! 🙂

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