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An officer asks Detective London to track Kelli Rocha (wanted for assault), she agrees, Shifts to a large German Shepherd, and begins tracking with Dale following, but Dale ends up on the wrong side of a crosswalk, and London sees a woman matching Kelli’s description getting away.

I skipped nothing.

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Decision made, London plunged into the crowd, moving fast and leaving a trail of complaints behind her. She might have to apologize to a few of them later, but at least she’d have made her collar to sweeten the bitter taste of crow.

Nearing the spot where she last spotted Kelli, she slowed, easing through the crowd and trying not to draw too much attention to herself.

There! Ahead, she spotted Kelli again, moving at the same pace as the rest of the crowd,  expression calm. But Kelli’s nervousness was betrayed by the sweat staining the open button-up tossed over her stained white t-shirt.

She picked up her pace, sliding past the last few people between her and her target, and deliberately bumped against Kelli’s leg. The force of her impact, with most of her weight behind it, staggered the other woman. 

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Four Feet and a Badge is my NaNoWriMo story.

In 1952, an event moved two and a half million people from one version of the Earth to another, a quarter of them Shifters (able to change their shape). It’s now 2015, and those people have married and had children. The Static (non-Shifters) fit in fine, but the Shifters often have to prove their worth.

Detective Amy London works in Seattle’s Narcotics Section, Shifting to four feet to sniff out drugs and chase down suspects. But she can be a little impulsive–like when she bit her previous partner, earning her a new one, strict, by-the-book Detective Janice Dale.

Dale tries to rein in her partner’s wilder behavior, not always with much success. And a new group of cocaine suppliers is muscling in on the city, and they’re leaving bodies behind. London and Dale will have to work through their differences to bring these dealers down, before the body count rises.

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About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

30 responses »

  1. chellecordero says:

    This is really good use of description, sets the scene very nicely.

  2. Good action. Consider the last sentence beginning with London. I wasn’t sure who ‘she’ was at first.

  3. Marcia says:

    Great suspense here, really like this. I jumped when Kelli got bumped into, that’s how caught up I got 🙂

  4. sadiecass says:

    The descriptions are spot on. I felt as if I was there…

    (still playing, although my link isn’t on the wewriwa site)

  5. Frank Fisher says:

    Nice descriptions! I wonder who that woman is that they bumped into?

    • caitlinstern says:

      The previous snippets show London tracking a woman who has fled arrest–Kelli–and last weekend’s snippet had London spotting Kelli.

      Now she’s finally caught up–but London’s partner hasn’t.

  6. Gemma Parkes says:

    Good attention to detail, looking forward to seeing who this is.

    • caitlinstern says:

      Sorry, some details can’t be fit into eight sentence snippets.

      It’s Kelli, the woman who beat someone up in a bar fight the night before and fled arrest the next morning. The next snippets will show how much of a temper Kelli has. o.O

  7. Yes, but how is she going to make the arrest?

  8. Shock for Kelli, that’s for sure! I enjoyed that detail…great excerpt!

  9. Carrie-Anne says:

    I hope she keeps Kelli restrained or in her sights until her partner gets there.

  10. Sarah W says:

    Too cool!

    Unless a passerby thinks she’s a regular dog attacking a defenseless woman . . .

    • caitlinstern says:

      It’s a fine line, I think–she’s wearing her badge, and is a bit large for a real dog. Still, people could think that. Which is why London bumped Kelli, instead of biting her.

      (London also has a vest that says ‘police’ on it, which she hates wearing.)

  11. Visual and easy to read. Nothing tripped me up.

    Every time I read your premise, I think how good it is. Nice 8, Caitlin! 🙂

  12. Millie Burns says:

    She can arrest her by chomping down on the seat of her pants : ) That’s a funny mental picture : ) I hope her partner gets there soon. This is such a great story line…I love it.

  13. Harliqueen says:

    Another brilliant excerpt, sounds like such an original story 🙂

    • caitlinstern says:

      Sometimes I’m struck with the desire to take something (like shapeshifters) and make up my own rules, which is why I write in the fantasy genre so much.

      Might as well embrace my inner geek, right? 😉

  14. Nice catch, I hope the back up will come fast.

  15. Great description and suspense. Looking forward to what happens next!

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