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Shield of Namarr is a sword-and-sorcerer type fantasy WIP, set in a kingdom that suffers from magically-created, vicious creatures. Three friends bought a finding-things-lost potion, and set out to track down a stolen magical stone–they’ve found a river, ride across one at a time, with a rope around their waist in case of daggerfish attack, and as Auber crosses last, something attacks the horse. Shan yells at Reagan “get ready to pull!”



Regan nodded, jaw tense, fingers clutching the mare’s reins, waiting for the right moment to tug Blaze into motion.

Auber’s gelding lashed out with his hooves, hampered by the silt-filled water around him, and jerked again from another impact. This time, instead of regaining his footing, Nemesis collapsed under the surface.

When he surfaced, snorting, a moment later, Auber no longer sat on his back.

Frantic, Shan hauled on the rope as Regan urged Blaze backwards, the rope jerking out of Shan’s hands when the animal finally pulled away. For a moment, their efforts had no effect, the rope disappearing into the churning water as Nemesis thrashed and bellowed, fighting for the shore.

Several heart-wrenching moments later, Auber broke into the open air, hair soaking wet and plastered flat. Batting at the water, Auber kicked, foot catching something under the water, raising a flash of silver scales as a daggerfish leapt clear.

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Originally, Shield of Namarr was intended to be a very short snippet, but some things I wrote at the end raised some questions–which led to more story. I’m currently working on some world-building and character development so I can figure out where the story goes next.

Shan, Auber, and Reagan visit a Stonespeller, a mage who works mostly in animated stone, to buy a potion that will help them recover a lost stone, the Shield of Namarr, which powers a shield that keeps magically-created, dangerous creatures from entering the city they live in. Failure to return the Shield quickly will have deadly consequences for their friend,  Jamie, whose life-force is currently powering the shield-spell.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

27 responses »

  1. Christina Ochs says:

    I love this- so suspenseful! this is such an effective action sequence. *takes notes*

  2. Powerful. My heart lurched when Auber fell in the water. I knew you’d save him, Caitlin. Read sighs with relief.

  3. Frank Fisher says:

    Very well paced and full of suspense. You had me engaged the whole way through.

  4. Eleri Stone says:

    Great action scene! Completely pulled into it.

  5. Gemma Parkes says:

    Exciting and very visual!

  6. Botanist says:

    Sounds like Auber’s not in the clear yet. Those fish were what they were afraid of, and now they’re here…

  7. Oh wow, extremely tense! I could see the entire sequence from your excellent description…great snippet.

  8. K. (@ScrivK) says:

    Nice, I like it! I like the premise of the story as well. Looking forward to reading more of it! (I hope Nemesis makes it through ok, those damned Daggerfish!)

  9. Holy daggerfish! My heart is pounding! Great tension and I love the last line. I still worry for Nemesis, but keep my fingers crossed that he can fight his way to safety;).

  10. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love how you bring this scene to life with all the dramatic, tense details.

  11. enough small fish can kill. Think of pirhannas.

  12. Sarah W says:

    Gah! Daggerfish!

    I held my breath until he took one, Caitlin! Way to crank the tension! 😀

  13. Gem Sivad says:

    Very exciting scene. Daggerfish bring to mind sharp teeth and very bad outcomes. Hope the horses make it safely across too.

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