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“Jabberwock Keys” is a complete just-for-fun short story that could use some polishing. A sorcerer hires  jabberwock named Daisy to guard his treasure, given a silver flute to summon her, and with Daisy following, returns to his tower on a spire of rocks, stopping at a tunnel opening in the cliffs below the tower.

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The tree tops tossed, and the Jabberwock slid out between the trunks, the bloody haunch of a deer caught in her jaws. She paused and dropped the haunch to the rocks, ripping off great bites, flesh and hide tearing, bones crunching under her powerful teeth.

Finished, she rubbed her bloody muzzle on a patch of grass, before taking several surprisingly dainty nibbles of a nearby bush, shearing it neatly to a stub of a trunk. Daisy crossed the distance between her and the sorcerer with flowing and lightning-quick strides, so fast Magnus recoiled in his saddle, and cocking her head to the side, the Jabberwock burbled inquiringly.

“I need you to stay close to me in the caves,” Magnus said.

The Jabberwock nodded, bobbing her head up and down.

The caves he’d carved into the rock, shored up with magic and metal supports, were  large enough for the Jabberwock to pass through, so Magnus rode his horse into them, and when he glanced back to check on her, not trusting his ears in the weird echoes of the caves, she was studying the way intently.

As they emerged from the darkness into the bright light bathing the exposed cliff-top, the Jabberwock stretched her wings and neck, enjoying her freedom from the tunnels.

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Due to NaNoWriMo, I’ll probably be a little slower than usual, but I still value your feedback, frazzled as I am!

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About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

30 responses »

  1. Sarah W says:

    I want a Daisy! 😀

  2. Frank Fisher says:

    I like the gory details of the Jabberwock devouring the deer.

  3. I love Daisy;). Wonderfully visual descriptions and intriguing details. Looking forward to more.

  4. I think you’ve spoiled me for any other kind of pet now. Is it weird that I find Daisy adorable in spite of her horrendous dining habits?

  5. Carrie-Anne says:

    That Jabberwock has a voracious appetite!

  6. Gemma Parkes says:

    Great imagery! Very visual snippet.

  7. Your descriptions are getting better and better each week. Dainty Daisy cleansed her muzzle in the grass. How adorable. The world isn’t expansive enough to contain her.

  8. Love “shored up with magic and metal supports.” Great visuals and hint of interesting relationship between Magus and the Jabberwock.

  9. Lisa Medley says:

    Great details! The Jabberwock is so compelling to me 😀 Nice 8!

  10. Alexis Duran says:

    Eat the neighbors, you say? (Rubs chin thoughtfully). Well, everyone has said it but Daisy is awesome. I wonder how well Magus will do handling her.

  11. I love Daisy, especially the dainty way she eats her vegetation LOL. I’m still wondering what on Earth Magnus has to protect that requires the services of a Jabberwock! Excellent excerpt!

  12. burnsmillie says:

    Daisy the dainty Jabberwock! So in love with her, and your imagination : )

  13. chellecordero says:

    The name Daisy is fantastic, even though a large carnivore has to live as nature intended, it still is such a contradiction (at least in our mind’s imagination). I like how she nibbles on the brush daintily, cocks her head to the side and burbbles. Great snippet.

  14. Gem says:

    Hmmm…I don’t think the sorcerer would want to upset her. Daisy seems to be quite capable of about anything. 😀

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