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This is a snippet from my yet-to-be-completed NaNoWriMo story, Black Ink Plague, a fantasy about inkbloods, people who were left at the roots of a magic tree as babies, and can use charcoal from those trees to write and cast spells.
The main character, an inkblood called Liar, cast a spell to kill the gang leader called Cin, accepted payment from the gang’s second in command, then traveled to a nicer part of town, where she offers her mother some of the money to repay part of her school debts.
“I have much to do today, if you will excuse me?” Though it sounded like a question, Liar’s mother didn’t wait for a response, whisking out of the room.
Liar poked the bag of money, hearing a muted clink. “Not even a single word of thanks,” she growled. “What else did I expect?”
She strode out of the room and down the hall, moving so quickly that her split skirt flapped around her ankles in an angry snap of fabric with each step, and the butler barely managed to reach the door ahead of her.
“Have a good day, Miss Moon,” he murmured, the words rough from his breathless rush to the door.
“Thank you,” Liar inclined her head politely, reminding herself that there was no point in being rude to the staff.
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Black Ink Plague is set in a world similar to ours, with the addition of the Rakau tree, which has magical properties–charcoal or ink from the tree can be used to cast spells. However, only inkbloods, babies who were left overnight at a Rakau tree’s roots on their first full moon, can harvest and use the tree. The price they pay for their magic is that the ink infects them, staining their skin and eventually forming words from the spells they cast on their skin. These words change their lives in unexpected ways.
Powerful image of her storming off! The ending was a nice touch and very realistic!
Liar has only so much patience, which is plenty more that I might have!
You’ve written a scene expressing her hurt and loneliness. I like her.
I had to cut it from the snippet, but her brother loved her–which makes her parents excluding her from the loss even more painful. But she perseveres!
I’m thinking Liar should keep future assassin salary payments for herself. It only seems fair if her mom’s going to be mean about it. I love that she wears a split skirt. So practical, yet cute!
I set the story in a sort-of alternate Earth, far enough in the past that a woman in pants would stand out more than Liar wants to. This seemed like the best compromise. Women’s clothes are complicated!
I love the image of her in this scene. And it’s telling that she’s not willing to take out her frustration on the staff, even though the butler was rude to her, if I remember correctly.
He’s disdainful, but he does his job with exactness, a small kindness compared to how other servants would ‘forget’ Liar.
I’m fascinated by every detail from this world. Loved the way the fabric snapped around her ankles, excellent description. Can;t wait for more!
Liar is just shy of stomping like a teen right now–it’s amazing how you can convey emotion just by the way you walk.
I like your story premise. It makes me wonder how Liar will be affected by the words from her spells.
Terrible things. Because no one said writers have to be nice to their characters.
With a mother like that, Liar would probably be better off not trying to establish a relationship!
Yeah, she would be… but she keeps trying!
Well done! Liar’s mother is truly horrible. She was an excellent decision to further build our sympathy for Liar’s character. I can’t wait for the next snippet.
She could be worse, really–abusive instead of distant. But she’s no prize, for sure!