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This is from a WIP, with the placeholder name of “Bluebeard,” very loosely based on that fairy tale. Every year on the Winter Solstice, a sorcerer takes a sixteen-year-old girl as his bride, divorcing her and exiling her before he takes a new bride the next year.

Summary: The sorcerer Aamir “Mire” has married the narrator, Gwyn, spelled them into his tower, interviewed her, suggested rather rudely that she can visit his bedroom if she gets lonely, and she stormed off. She decided to snoop around his floor, and just as she was about to leave his bedroom, he opened the door.



His hair lay flat, damp against his skin, of which plenty was visible in his carelessly belted robe.

My cheeks blazed with embarrassed heat.

“Changed your mind already?” He asked with a knowing smile.

“I was exploring. Why don’t I get a balcony?”

His smile cracked and vanished. “Stay off the balcony.” He pushed past me, checking the door as if I might have tampered with it.
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This story is very loosely based on Bluebeard. The sorcerer is cursed, and the brides are caught up in the curse, though the nearby villagers don’t know how or why. He keeps the kingdom safe with his magic, and his brides tie him to a land he couldn’t otherwise protect. There are other ways to do this tying–but his curse demands a bride.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

30 responses »

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    For WIP, not a finished product, I’m impressed by how perspicuous your prose it.

  2. Kim Magennis says:

    Hmmm. Just the thing to get her curiosity going. A definite negative command. I wonder how long it will take before she disobeys him?

  3. Gemma Parkes says:

    He has lots of secrets, intriguing!

  4. This is like a game of ping pong. Back and forth. Who will win?

  5. Millie Burns says:

    Oh I like it. Sort of like Beast’s rose, hmm? But her breaking the rules could lead to someone dangling from great heights!

  6. Alexis Duran says:

    She never remains on the defensive for long, does she? Great interaction between these two, as always.

  7. chellecordero says:

    I get the feeling that his curmudgeon-yism is the result of heartbreak due to this curse – I wonder if she will be able to break through his wall and, of course, if she will survive the curse.

  8. Carrie-Anne says:

    It’ll be tricky to extricate herself from this awkward situation!

  9. Well his humor is gone, but I wonder whether he’ll still try to press the issue of other things they could be doing in his bedroom!

  10. Oh, now she definitely has to find out what’s up with the balcony!

  11. elainecsc201 says:

    That was certainly curious. What’s up with the balcony?

  12. Ohhh, what’s up with the balcony? Another intriguing exchange that leaves me hungry for more. Great snippet.

  13. Uh oh, now I’m thoroughly intrigued about the balcony! Really enjoying this story, can’t wait for more. Terrific snippet!

  14. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    Of course he would tell her not to go out on the balcony. Bet she does anyway. lol Enjoyed the snippet.

  15. You drop that information in there so smoothly! “His hair lay flat, damp against his skin, of which plenty was visible in his carelessly belted robe.” Nice job, Caitlin! As I’ve said before, I can hardly wait to read this!

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