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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2015, Forest Wed. The gods of a town in the rain forest chose a new forest wed couple from the unmarried young people–Addan and Kaie (who was engaged)–they marry, return their totems to the gods’ statues, and patrol the edges of the village, where something has followed them from in the trees. Adann’s last line asked if the thing making the noise has left, or is watching them.


Kaie glanced at her, “Why would you think that?”

“It’s better to think there might be something watching you from the branches, waiting to drop of you and break your neck, than to think there couldn’t be. If you’re cautious and wrong, there’s no problem, but if you’re careless and wrong . . .” Adann trailed off, considering her next words, and then settled on a shrug instead.

“You’re a bit more bloody minded than I expected,” Kaie said, after a long silence.

“You hardly know me, so it’s not surprising, is it?”

“I know you just fine,” Kaie snapped.

“Mmm,” Adann watched a flight of bright yellow birds break through the cover of the forest, flying through the scattered greenery of the town before plunging back into the dense weave of branches.

They completed the rest of the patrol in silence, their gazes scanning the area around them, and didn’t look at each other once until they stood in front of the gods’ statues again.


*    *    *

Beikife is a small town in something like the Amazon rain forest, protected by a pair of married gods. The gods are represented by human avatars, two young people chosen and married by divine power. The strength of the marriage represents the bond between the gods’ blessing, so the new forest wed must find a way to connect to each other, or the crops will fail, the rivers will flood, and the cursed monsters that live in the forest will claim many lives.


About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

32 responses »

  1. Kim Magennis says:

    Enjoying the scratchiness of their interactions, nicely done Caitlin!

  2. Hmm, Kaie thinks he knows her, but is surprised at her “bloody-mindedness?” I have a feeling he’s going to be surprised a few more times before this is over.

  3. naomi shaw says:

    Now I’m really curious as to whether they are being watched and are they in danger. Great snippet

  4. The dialogue is fine. Added to the scenery, you have a most interesting story.

  5. Cara Bristol says:

    Their dialogue as they get to know each is excellent. I like how they’re finding out things about each other that they didn’t expect.

  6. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Still so much reluctance from Kaie. This is going to be tough for both of them. Great snippet! 🙂

  7. Bonnie Gill says:

    Hi Catlin. I really enjoyed your excerpt. I love how Adann trails off then shrugs. Nice job. The premise sounds interesting.

  8. I think they may surprise each other more than a few times! and maybe surprise the gods as well? I think the dialog here is perfect for showing us the developing relationship – excellent excerpt.

  9. Ed Hoornaert says:

    I wonder what she means by “I know you just fine.”

    • I may possibly skip ahead to the snippet where she explains.
      But, for now, I’ll say this–Kaie is not as good as she is at paying attention to other people, despite what he thinks.

  10. My, aren’t we being a bit Snippy McSnipperton? Wonder why she thinks she knows him so well. But at least nothing dropped down on them from the trees. The bigger danger seems to be between them! Great snippet, loving this story. Must.Know.More!

  11. Wow–their rough start isn’t getting any easier. Good continued tension, Caitlin. 🙂

  12. Daryl Devore says:

    Love the dialogue- 2 people trying to figure an awkward situation out.

  13. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    So awkward. They know ‘of’ each other. They don’t really ‘know’ each other. I want to see how this relationship develops. 🙂 Great banter and imagery.

  14. elainecsc2013 says:

    I do feel bad for both of them. They really don’t know each other, and this must be so hard for them.

  15. I love the awkward antagonism between them and can’t wait to see what happens next! Great snippet.

  16. Realistic dialog, good job with that. I’m guessing they like each other well enough but haven’t faced a true test of their relationship. so I’m sure they’ll find whatever happens as scary as readers do! Hope you pick up from here next time.

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