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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2015, Forest Wed. The gods of a town in the rain forest chose a new forest wed couple from the unmarried young people–Addan and Kaie (who was engaged)–they marry, share a chaste wedding night, and in the morning Kaie hurries off to fish away from Addan, returning to find she has brought some decorations for the home, and taken in a small pile of gifts, which she offers to share how he likes.

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“I do want these beads, though, if you don’t mind,” Adann said, “I have an idea for what to make with them.”

Staring down at his hands, Kaie didn’t see Adann approach, so the first thing he knew of how close she’d gotten was when she tapped one of the stone beads gently on the counter top.

“I don’t need them, you can have them,” he said, without glancing at the beads in her outstretched hand.

“You haven’t even really looked at them, so how do you know?”

“Sometimes you don’t need to study something, to know you don’t want it,” he snapped, turning away to search for flavorings for the fish.

Click, click, click. Adann placed each bead on the counter. “You can think about it, just in case.”

Before he could tell her no again, she left the room, hurrying this time, so he could hear her heels thumping the floor. He looked up to see her disappearing around the doorway, then heard the swish of the outside door mat being pushed aside, and her feet racing down the stairs.

*    *    *

Beikife is a small town in something like the Amazon rain forest, protected by a pair of married gods. The gods are represented by human avatars, two young people chosen and married by divine power. The strength of the marriage represents the bond between the gods’ blessing, so the new forest wed must find a way to connect to each other, or the crops will fail, the rivers will flood, and the cursed monsters that live in the forest will claim many lives.

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About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

36 responses »

  1. Kim Magennis says:

    Wow! That cut through skin and bone! Excellent snippet Caitlin. Created a huge mix of emotion in me.

  2. I wonder if she thought he meant that he didn’t have to study her, to know that he didn’t want her? Interesting.

    • Strangely enough, I don’t spend too much time thinking about what one character is thinking when my POV is focused on a different character. So I’m not sure. She could just be upset because her peace offering was soundly rejected.

  3. Ed Hoornaert says:

    She’s at least trying, while he’s being a jerk. She’ll get through to him, though. Right?

  4. Peter Vialls says:

    Ouch – he’s not making any effort. She was trying to build some kind of relationship and he’s slamming the door (metaphorically) on her.

    • He has been stewing, so he wasn’t too receptive to the effort. Kaie needs to stop thinking about the past, but he’s having a difficult time of it, and it’s making him a jerk.

  5. astonwest says:

    Ouch…hope he’s not trying to put a spin on their marriage with his talk here…

  6. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Oh, that was very hurtful. I’m really hoping things do work out between these two. I come back every week, hoping this will be the week. You’ve got me hooked. 🙂

  7. naomi shaw says:

    A bit of conflict, which makes for a ver interesting scene. Great snippet

  8. Alexis Duran says:

    Marvelous snippet. You really show how cutting simple words can be, and then her reaction was so telling. I hope Adann wakes up before he does too much damage.

  9. Last week I was sympathetic, but now he’s acting like a jerk. So typical of a complex character! 😀

  10. He does come across as complex. Clearly something’s eating at him that he doesn’t know how to handle, and like a lot of guys, he’d rather wrestle with it himself than ask for help. I hope she doesn’t give up!

    Marcia

  11. Um, owwww. And here I’d just been feeling bad for him after last time. And her reaction is interesting, leaving the beads in case he changes his mind. A good metaphor for their relationship. Will he really want actual beads, though?

    • He’s been feeling bad for himself, too. 😉
      No, he doesn’t want the actual beads–she only wanted him to actually decide whether or not he wanted a gift, instead of rejecting everything.

  12. chellecordero says:

    “Sometimes you don’t need to study something, to know you don’t want it” – what a cold, cold line. I know how angry and disappointed he is, in many ways justified, but I feel bad for the girl, it’s not her fault.
    Following this story along to see what happens.

  13. Botanist says:

    Some unintentional truths coming out here, I think!

  14. Carrie-Anne says:

    That’s such a cruel, unkind cut, particularly when it was starting to seem like they were slowly growing to care more about one another.

  15. I’m definitely on her side. Even if he’s guilty, he should appreciate her kindness. Great snippet!

  16. Oh that was so not the right thing to say . Poor Adann – that much have hurt so much.

  17. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    I feel so sorry for her. He’s hurting. I get that, but maybe he should stop wallowing in his grief and realize she didn’t ask for this marriage anymore than he did. Enjoyed the snippet and getting snippy too. lol

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