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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2015, Forest Wed. (I’m skipping ahead.) Addan and Kaie (who was engaged), are married as symbols of their gods, and 2 weeks into their marriage, the gods’ blessing and the town are suffering, so they are sent on a hunting trip with two experienced hunters (Rui and Corliss). Kaie and Adann set traps and returned to camp, where Adann stared at Corliss for so long that she and Kaie were sent fishing. Last line, Corliss: “Do not get hurt or killed, understand?”

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“Yeah,” Adann smiled at Corliss, but this wasn’t one of her usual warm smiles, or impish grins–this maniacal grimace showed too much tooth, and was distinctly crooked.

Corliss winced, and turned away, muttering under her breath.

“Come on, Kaie, let’s go fishing,” Adann dropped the frightening smile, and it should have left some sort of trace in her eyes, but it didn’t, the unnerving expression wiped away like it had never been there.

He didn’t see a reason to hang around the hunters who seemed determined to ignore or insult them, Adann’s strange behavior or not, so he followed her. She investigated the nearby tree branches, cut off two, and sharpened the points into fishing spears, humming softly as she whittled away with her knife.

Taking the finished spear she offered, Kaie moved to a likely looking spot on the bank, and Adann moved downstream, wading into the water. Kaie kept to dry ground, and the firmer stance it offered.

He speared one small fish, and sometime later, speared a second one, without Adann having even cast her spear once. The water raced by, and he studied the silvery flashes of the fish swimming in the current, searching for one that was close enough, waiting for the right moment.

A loud splash from downstream startled him so badly he almost dropped his spear.

*    *    *

Beikife is a small town in something like the Amazon rain forest, protected by a pair of married gods. The gods are represented by human avatars, two young people chosen and married by divine power. The strength of the marriage represents the bond between the gods’ blessing, so the new forest wed must find a way to connect to each other, or the crops will fail, the rivers will flood, and the cursed monsters that live in the forest will claim many lives.

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About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

38 responses »

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    I would’ve guessed she fell in, except she is, or should be, too experienced. Unless, of course, there’s some other reason for her strange behavior.

  2. chellecordero says:

    Such a serene setting with the water and the silvery fish, it is setting it up for something major to happen… and then we have the splash.

  3. Kim Magennis says:

    Awesome hook, Caitlin.
    Now, we just HAVE to know what has happened.

  4. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Oh, did she find a big one? Is that what she was waiting for? Great snippet! I want to know what happens next! 🙂

  5. Uh-oh, something’s clearly not right with Adann. But I love that Kaie has made note of her various smiles.

    • She smiles at him a lot, but not in the creepy way she just smiled at Corliss. Adann’s a little passive-aggressive when she’s trying to get on someone’s nerves.

  6. Something not good is going on, but conversely that’s good for the story 🙂 Of course now all kinds of questions are raised and we really want to know what happens next!

    Marcia

  7. Uh oh! You’re really leaving us hanging here, Caitlin!

    Great continuation of this story! Can hardly wait to read it in its entirety!

  8. Some interesting, discordant notes there, like the smile. Makes me wonder what’s going on beneath the surface, as it were. Really well done snippet.

  9. Botanist says:

    Uh-oh, either she’s fallen in or speared something huge!

  10. Alexis Duran says:

    Sounds like Adann is taking to hunting with relish. Love that she’s not all sweetness and light.

  11. S. A. Hoag says:

    What’s downstream? Great snippet.

  12. Gak! What made the loud splash?! Nice work. 🙂

  13. Splash?! Serene, quiet fishing scene and then…Wow, great hook!

  14. elainecsc2013 says:

    Everything is so quiet and serene I keep expecting something to happen.

  15. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love how you brought this scene to life. I’m wondering if the loud splash were from a human, animal, or something else.

  16. Okay, I’m ready for the next part. Write on.

  17. Nice, serene scene… Wonder what interrupted it? 😉

  18. I wonder what’s up with Adann and what was that splash about. It doesn’t seem like the usual fishing party.

  19. Heather Boyd says:

    Is Adann paying too much attention to the wrong partner? Intriguing snippet. I want to know more.

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