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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2015, Forest Wed. Adann and Kaie (who was engaged), are married as symbols of their gods, and 2 weeks into their marriage, the gods’ blessing and the town are suffering, so they are sent on a hunting trip with two experienced hunters (Rui and Corliss). On the third day, Kaie and Adann  climb a tree and talk–Adann’s last line is that the hunters only need to check on them tree times a day or so.

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“They’re not very good teachers, are they?” Kaie asked.

“I don’t think they’re here to teach us–right now they’re worried about one thing.”

“Me.” He sounded so hopeless, Adann’s eyes stung with tears.

She blinked them away, keeping her gaze trained on the treetops, worried that if she turned toward him, she might start crying. “Not you, us.  This is a two person problem, and it must be a two person solution.”

“I…” He fell silent for a long time,and she waited, because he seemed to be thinking.

“You’re right,” he said, finally, and nothing more for a long time.

*    *    *

Beikife is a small town in something like the Amazon rain forest, protected by a pair of married gods. The gods are represented by human avatars, two young people chosen and married by divine power. The strength of the marriage represents the bond between the gods’ blessing, so the new forest wed must find a way to connect to each other, or the crops will fail, the rivers will flood, and the cursed monsters that live in the forest will claim many lives.

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About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

28 responses »

  1. Kim Magennis says:

    Excellent dialogue, Caitlin. I am enjoying this gradual change of direction.

  2. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Oh, I have a lump in my throat. Here comes the inevitable conversation. I’m very curious as to what will happen next.

  3. Ah, now we’re getting to the meat of the problem. Looking forward to the coming conversation, though they probably aren’t.

    Putting on my mod hat, could you please make sure you have a link back to the WeWrIWa page? Thanks!

  4. Alexis Duran says:

    She’s so compassionate toward him. Maybe he’s about to start reciprocating? Lovely dialogue.

  5. Botanist says:

    Is realization slowly sinking in?

  6. She’s so wise and he’s so….clueless? I mean ok, I get that he was engaged and all, but still. Meet the girl halfway! Great snippet, I am SO invested in the story.

  7. julieevelynjoyce says:

    Great dialogue, Caitlin! Looking forward to seeing where you take it from here! 🙂

  8. Oh, he may come around after all. Well done.

  9. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love the emotions in their dialogue. They really do seem to be drawing closer together.

  10. Ed Hoornaert says:

    With wisdom and compassion beyond her years, she continues to accustom him to the idea of being married to her.

  11. Whitney says:

    I agree with many other readers that it does raise my interest–I want to know what happens next! Glad she’s got a good head on her shoulders.

  12. She’s so smart to lead him along slowly so that what he learns will stick.

    Marcia

  13. She sees a lot of potential in him to be putting this much effort into bringing him around.

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