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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2015, Forest Wed. Adann and Kaie (who was engaged), are married as symbols of their gods, and 2 weeks into their marriage, the gods’ blessing and the town are suffering, so they are sent on a hunting trip with two experienced hunters (Rui and Corliss). On the third day, Kaie and Adann  climb a tree and talk about their future.



Below them, something scream in rage and pain.

The traps were designed, if possible, to kill the animal they trapped, but if they failed, it was the hunter’s task to bring swift mercy. As quickly as they could, they scrambled down the branches, helping each other as they went, until they both stood on solid ground.

“Over there, right?” Kaie asked, pointing.

Adann nodded, and they raced towards the source of the scream, Kaie’s longer legs outpacing her. She skidded around the last corner of the trail to find Kaie stabbing at a kien, a monster that combined a snake and an anteater, which had one of its hind legs trapped in the noose.

Wincing at their terrible luck, Adann noticed that the kien’s sharp claws had already damaged the reinforced leather of the snare. Soon enough, it would break free, and they’d have an even worse fight on their hands.

The kien screamed again, showing off its fangs. Liquid beaded off the curved daggers, catching the light.

*    *    *

Beikife is a small town in something like the Amazon rain forest, protected by a pair of married gods. The gods are represented by human avatars, two young people chosen and married by divine power. The strength of the marriage represents the bond between the gods’ blessing, so the new forest wed must find a way to connect to each other, or the crops will fail, the rivers will flood, and the cursed monsters that live in the forest will claim many lives.


About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

28 responses »

  1. Kim Magennis says:

    Wow! Now that was scary. Excellent dynamics, Caitlin. You get the sense of danger and power across very well.

    (Just one sentence:
    Below them, something scream in rage and pain.)

  2. Ed Hoornaert says:

    The infusion of action and danger feels like a welcome spice to your story.

  3. Carrie-Anne says:

    That’s an intense scene! I wouldn’t want to be the one facing down that kind of creature.

  4. As Ed said, action and danger is a welcome spice to the story.

  5. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Yikes! What a nasty situation. I have a feeling something really bad is about to happen. Is it next weekend already? 😉

  6. Dramatic scene. I’m wondering though, if this animal is so fearsome, how it got caught in the trap? Snake anteater combo with legs…hmm. Probably very scary to confront!

  7. Scary! If one of them gets hurt, it might change the dynamics in this little group, maybe they’d all have to work together more. Hope you pick up right from here next time!


  8. Alexis Duran says:

    So much for the romantic moment in the tree! Exciting, scary situation. I’m with Jessica. Is it next week yet?

  9. Yikes! Well, I guess they can talk later. Taking out monsters is definitely the priority!

  10. Oh no! They’ve had quite the luck since their marriage. I hope they’re able to take the monster down without getting hurt!

  11. Yikes! I don’t think I’d want to confront that beastie!

  12. Yikes! Kill the beast! Kill the beast! Great, descriptive writing! 🙂

  13. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    What a great scene! Felt the intense need to reach the trap, and felt the fear. Well done.

  14. Wow, what a ride! Great snippet.

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