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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2015, Forest Wed. Adann and Kaie (who was engaged), are married as symbols of their gods, and 2 weeks into their marriage, the gods’ blessing and the town are suffering, so they are sent on a hunting trip with two experienced hunters (Rui and Corliss). On the third day, Kaie and Adann are talking, and when Adann asks for a kiss, Kaie reacts badly and storms off alone, running into an angry ryapi (ocelot/boar monster)–he breaks free and Adann joins in the attack. (I’ve skipped over some fighting)
“Adann!” Kaie yelled.
“I’m not leaving you here!” she shouted back, which made the ryapi’s ears flick towards her. Taking a few more steps back, she kept her gaze fixed on the enraged, wounded animal.
They would have a talk, Kaie determined, about fighting a deadly monster with no weapons in hand. She hadn’t reached for her sling, because it was near useless against the thick bones and dense hair of the ryapi, and he wished she carried another long knife, not only the little one used to cut fruit, which would also be about as useful as a splinter in this fight.
He didn’t want to draw the ryapi’s attention to her again, so he moved in, as it lowered its head, pawed the ground, and charged again. Turning, he readied the spear to throw, but the ryapi crashed to its knees.
They both closed in, and roaring, the ryapi shoved to its paws, lunged at Kaie, and then toppled over, legs stiff.
Adann stared at him, wide-eyed, face ashy pale, “Did we … is it dead?”
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~~~***I’ll be doing National Novel Writing Month in November, so I may be slow in my replies, but I’ll still be blogging! Good luck to all the NaNoWriMos! ***~~~
Beikife is a small town in something like the Amazon rain forest, protected by a pair of married gods. The gods are represented by human avatars, two young people chosen and married by divine power. The strength of the marriage represents the bond between the gods’ blessing, so the new forest wed must find a way to connect to each other, or the crops will fail, the rivers will flood, and the cursed monsters that live in the forest will claim many
What happened to the ryapi? I have a feeling it was not their doing, but someone or something else. Great snippet! I always want to read more. 🙂
I skipped over some fighting, since people weren’t too fond of the previous slaying. They did the damage, with a lot more effort that the previous monster!
Well, that was a close one!
Running blindly into a jungle, never a good idea. 😉
Did I detect a flicker of concern? These two might be getting somewhere.
(History Sleuth’s wewriwa mystery)
Nothing like almost getting killed to bond people.
These two better get their act together before their luck runs out.
They do have some protection from their gods–like fast healing, so they have a better chance than you might think. 😉
Well, okay then. I’m out of breath myself LOL. Thanks for sparing us more details of the episode (not a fan of too much gory stuff although you’re such a good writer). Excellent excerpt.
Several people were made queasy by the previous monster, and wild boar are difficult to kill, so I figured the drawn-out fight wouldn’t appeal!
The couple who kills together lives to have many babies together. An ancient proverb says.
Exciting snippet!
That ancient proverb is very accurate. 😉
Great snippet. Interesting world you’ve created.
Glad you like it. 🙂
I’m not quite sure how they killed it, but the creature’s death is very dramatic.
There was much stabbing, people nearly being gored or trampled to death, and bleeding, which previously people did not like. So I skipped over it.
I’ve watched some documentaries and read about wild boars–they’re quite difficult to kill!
Wait, what? How? What happened! Lots of tension in this snippet!
I had about two or three snippets of a bloody, determined boar trying to murder my characters, and I figured it would gross out some of the WeWriWas–so I skipped to the death scene. 😉
I almost wish you left the gory details in. Although it seems as though Adann doesn’t quite know how they killed it, either. Darn–you’re going to have to get this book into print fast so I can read it.
I went with the consensus from the last fight, where I left all the gory details in–and the word was ‘eww!’
It takes all kinds of readers, right?
Oh my goodness. Who killed it? Raises all kinds of questions. Good job.
I didn’t mean to cut so much of the gore out to be confusing. It was a combined effort–but Kaie struck the finishing blow. (He has a spear, Adann only has a knife, and boars have tough skin.)
I’m just gonna throw this out there: Kaie doesn’t deserve Adann! That girl’s one of a kind and certainly knows how to handle herself! Haha That said, I’m excited for him to realize just how special she is and show her how wonderful she is. 😀
Kaie’s not that bad. But I suppose I have a soft spot for my characters. 😉
What just happened? Did someone arrive to help them? I’m curious to know. What an intense scene. I’m really liking this story. 🙂
Yeah, I cut too much of the blood and fighting to try not to ick people out.
Basically Kaie used his spear, Adann used her knife to distract, and Kaie got nearly gored or trampled a few times.
Glad to hear it!
Yay! They did it- somehow. 🙂 Maybe Kaie will start to come around now.
He’s doing better than it seems–he had a knee-jerk reaction, and then made it worse by storming off. Kaie is still a teenager, after all. Hormones and poor decisions abound.
Did someone help them? Doesn’t sound like it so hooray for their cooperation.
I think I skipped over too much of the stabbing and blood–but no one helped them. Cooperation is a fine thing, indeed!
That should pull them closer together–a joint cause. You’re doing a good job of showing their developing feelings toward each other. 🙂
Thanks! 😀
Wow, intense! I hope they pull together as a team for good now!
I expect a few bumps in the road, bu they are working together much better now.