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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2015, Forest Wed. Adann and Kaie (who was engaged), are married as symbols of their gods, and 2 weeks into their marriage, the gods’ blessing and the town are suffering, so they are sent on a hunting trip with two experienced hunters (Rui and Corliss). On the third day, Kaie and Adann  are talking, and when Adann asks for a kiss, Kaie reacts badly and storms off alone, running into an angry ryapi (ocelot/boar monster)–which they manage to kill. Last lines: “Did we kill it?” “Yes.”


“Oh, thank the gods.” Adann pressed her hand to her heart, drawing in a few deep breaths, “when it knocked you down, I thought my heart might leap out of my throat.”

Watching her stand there, one arm wrapped around herself, still measuring the thump of her blood, and pale, Kaie felt the anger drain out of him.

“Now, we definitely need to find the others, and you need so many bandages.” She hurried to him, her hands skating over his injuries, skimming the air above each cut, “I was worried he’d really got you, but these aren’t very deep.”

After doing a quick scan of the area, she led him over to a moss covered stump, and handed him a cloth, a little pot of ointment, and the crushed herbs for paste. “Get what you can, and I’ll try to find Rui and Corliss.”

Before she stepped away, she touched his shoulder gently, on an unscratched area, “Are you okay, Kaie?”

“Why wouldn’t I be?”

“I’m not sure I am,” she responded.

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~~~***I’ll be doing National Novel Writing Month in November, so I may be slow in my replies, but I’ll still be blogging! Good luck to all the NaNoWriMos! ***~~~

Beikife is a small town in something like the Amazon rain forest, protected by a pair of married gods. The gods are represented by human avatars, two young people chosen and married by divine power. The strength of the marriage represents the bond between the gods’ blessing, so the new forest wed must find a way to connect to each other, or the crops will fail, the rivers will flood, and the cursed monsters that live in the forest will claim many

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

38 responses »

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Adann’s reactions are strong and visceral. Kaie’s reaction, on the other hand, are enigmatic — which makes his “Why wouldn’t I be?” sound perfect.

  2. Kim Magennis says:

    I agree with Ed, but it’s Adann’s “I don’t think I am” that got my attention. Nicely done as always, Caitlin!

  3. Cara Bristol says:

    I’m surprised she didn’t apply the ointment to his wounds.

  4. angelicadawson says:

    Oh no. I hope she’s okay.

  5. Enigmatic response yet they are still together over these many months. Hmm.

  6. Oooo I like all the openings that last line leaves. Nice!

  7. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Interesting development there! I love how Adann reveals how she feels about Kaie without doing it on purpose. And maybe that gave him pause? Oh, I want to read this entire story all the way through. 🙂

  8. She makes is so plain how worried she is, and he’s still holding back. Grr! Glad he’s all right though!

  9. Jayne Fury says:

    The imagery, the syntax, the emoting, all captivating. The flow of this snippet is clean and clear. Well done.

  10. Diane Burton says:

    I loved her last line. She’s trying to act all tough and in control, then she reveals more. Nice snippet.

  11. naomi shaw says:

    The last line is a good hook. Looking forward to more

  12. Both their reactions are wonderfully in character. Good luck with NaNo!

  13. julieevelynjoyce says:

    I so love the relationship between these two. Her honesty and openness is refreshing and I think–I hope–it’ll soon rub off on him.

  14. elainecsc2013 says:

    Get with the program, Kaie. She’s made it plain how worried she is about you.

    • Kaie is like a man who rolled his go-cart/ATV/ cycle in a spectacular crash, stood up, and declared he’s ‘fine.’ Adann is the wife demanding he go to the hospital, now!

  15. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love how their relationship is developing and getting closer, even though they’ve had some false starts along the way. I also love the enigmatic last line.

  16. These two! They’re so good in a physical challenge, like frighting your amazing collection of alien animals (said with respect for the imagination!) but they sure don’t talk well in the quiet times. Excellent excerpt and really this has been an intriguing story every step of the way so far.

  17. My goodness, I can see how that might have taken its toll on her. What an encounter. He, on the other hand, is not being entirely open, I think..LOL!

  18. Daryl Devore says:

    The love tension is so perfect in this story – give them a problem they are bold and work together- leave them a lone and they get tongue tied – awesome.

  19. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    Loved that last line she threw back. Hope it gets Kale’s attention as it did mine. 🙂

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