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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2016, currently called River, Tree, Mountain. It’s science fiction, set on a colony planet, six generations in–with about 10% of the population born “marvels,” who have special abilities like dowsing, healing, or creating fire. The protagonist, Rekka, is a spark (fire), signed a contract with Brenton to provide him a child, and traveled to be met with an empty apartment and a message saying he’s away on business–a few days later she’s at her first day of work, talking with Johansen, who scared off a male eavesdropper (Reyes) with pregnancy talk.


“Reyes there does a couple forms of sign language, too, stands behind speakers at big conventions. He’s real proud of how much he gets to travel–down to the southern continent more than once, and for all he talks about the beauty of the glaciers, you know he’s freezing his toes off.”

“I see,” Rekka said, “and does he give everyone nicknames like that?”

“You’re probably safe, since even for him, La-La is pretty ridiculous. But if he does come up with something you don’t like, you can tell him to shut it, and he’ll stop, I promise.”

“He still calls you Jo-Jo,” Rekka said.

“Well, he’s a moron, but he’s not so bad,” Johansen shrugged.

Behind her, Reyes chuckled, and she deftly flipped a crumpled napkin over her shoulder at him, bouncing it off his back.

Rekka finished her coffee, glanced at the time again, and rose, “I have a meeting soon, but it was nice talking to you.”

*    *    *

Life on the colony planet of Kaibou was going uneventfully until the second generation of colonists was born on the planet, at some, at a young age, began showing various psychic abilities. When those people, called marvels, grew up, many of them formed companies, building compounds to live in and raise their children.  Due to population diversity issues, many colonists have children using genetic bank material, or choose a succession of partners. Now on the seventh generation, marvels are born both within and without company walls, and all must work together to use their gifts and make a living on a still wild land. Some of these outsider marvels sign contracts with company marvels, agreeing to give them a child raised within the company, in return for a permanent home in the company compound, a stipend, and other concessions.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

26 responses »

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Cute banter, and very believable sounding.

  2. Frank Fisher says:

    I like the banter and the nickname “Jo-Jo”. Fun snippet!

  3. Almost like they’re real people in this fantasy. Fine snippet.

  4. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    It’s interesting how she’s getting the scoop on everyone when it’s just her first day. Johansen sounds like a lot of fun. 🙂

  5. This is very realistic workplace banter!

  6. Quite the collection of co-workers, feels like a real office all right! Great snippet…

  7. Kim Magennis says:

    There seems to be a real camaraderie between Reyes and Johansen. It comes across really well in their dialogue, nicely done Caitlin.

  8. It seems that information is the hottest commodity on this world. 🙂 Intriguing snippet!

  9. Love the dialogue! 😀

  10. Alexis Duran says:

    Realistic, fun dialogue. Great way to get to know the characters in this world.

  11. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    Very realistic fun banter. Pulled me right into the scene.

  12. Eek, dreaded nicknames. I had a few.

  13. SueBarr says:

    Nice snippet, Caitlin. Good dialogue is a lot of fun.

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