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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2016, currently called River, Tree, Mountain. It’s science fiction, set on a colony planet, six generations in–with about 10% of the population born “marvels,” who have special abilities like dowsing, healing, or creating fire. The protagonist, Rekka, is a spark (fire), signed a contract with Brenton to provide him a child, and traveled to be met with an empty apartment and a message saying he’s away on business–a few days later she’s at her first day of work, having met Johansen and Reyes, and while talking to Reyes in a smoking area outside, is interrupted by a woman asking if he has a light.



She turned, finding a middle-aged dark skinned woman with purple hair, who was holding a cigarette.

“I can light that for you,” she offered, summoning a spark with a flex of her power, and maintaining it so the pinprick of light grew into a small flame.

“A spark, are you?” the woman asked, leaning forward and lighting her cigarette on the flame, drawing in a breath and letting out smoke from her nose like a dragon.

Settling for a nod at such an obvious question, Rekka let the flame go out. “Nice to meet you,” she said to the woman, who smiled, waved the hand holding her cigarette, ember glowing at the end, and moved away.

“Derailed my train of thought,” Reyes complained, “Right–we’ll be working together, I figure. I saw your skills set on the database, and  you have experience with conferences, which is a lot of what I do.”

“You saw my skills set?” Rekka tipped her head to the side, watching him, and she was pretty sure a faint flush spread under his bronze skin across his impressive cheekbones.

“An hour ago,” Reyes waved the question away, “I was curious about the new face, is all.”

*    *    *

Life on the colony planet of Kaibou was going uneventfully until the second generation of colonists was born on the planet, at some, at a young age, began showing various psychic abilities. When those people, called marvels, grew up, many of them formed companies, building compounds to live in and raise their children.  Due to population diversity issues, many colonists have children using genetic bank material, or choose a succession of partners. Now on the seventh generation, marvels are born both within and without company walls, and all must work together to use their gifts and make a living on a still wild land. Some of these outsider marvels sign contracts with company marvels, agreeing to give them a child raised within the company, in return for a permanent home in the company compound, a stipend, and other concessions.


About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

29 responses »

  1. Your writing is so fluid in this excerpt. I could visualize each movement, each action, and it all was seamless. 🙂 Nicely done, Caitlin! 🙂

  2. Kim Magennis says:

    Excellent dialogue, as always, Caitlin. Teresa is right about how well this story is flowing. Good job

  3. Cara Bristol says:

    Nice snippet! I assume begins to use her special power for things greater than lighting cigarettes. Lol.

  4. nancygideon says:

    Nice, Caitlin! Very fluid.

  5. And the story grows and grows to catch our imagination. Very interesting, Caitlin.

  6. Ed Hoornaert says:

    You’ve got me wondering how he got hold of her records. Are they available to everyone, or is he special in some way?

  7. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    She seems to be fitting in quite well there. 🙂 I wonder if Reyes research is just curiosity, or something more.

    I forgot to sign up:

  8. daryldevore says:

    Love the short but concise description of the woman who wanted a light. I could visualise her. Tweeted.

  9. Interesting scene, feels like many story threads are being set up to pay off later, which is cool. Enjoyed the excerpt, crisply described as always!

  10. Can’t wait to see those talents at work! Great snippet.

  11. Whoops, caught snooping! All the co-workers seem so interesting!

  12. Nice dialogue and fluidly written. Well done.

  13. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love your dialogues, and the line about the small flame.

  14. Cool powers, and the dialogue flows naturally. Nice!

  15. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    His power might not be a big power, but still kind of cool. Enjoyed the snippet. Your words drew me right into the scene. I’m intrigued to know more.

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