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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2016, currently called River, Tree, Mountain. It’s science fiction, set on a colony planet, six generations in–with about 10% of the population born “marvels,” who have special abilities like dowsing, healing, or creating fire. The protagonist, Rekka, is a spark (fire), signed a contract with Brenton to provide him a child, and traveled to be met with an empty apartment and a message saying he’s away on business–a few days later he returns, makes breakfast, and after work takes her to the testing center, where they flirt and kiss, then Rekka tests for quantity of ignition points, then accuracy of targeting, range, and gets her results–and Ruby lies, saying a move from a weak 2 to a strong 3 isn’t a big deal, which Brenton doesn’t correct.


Rekka wasn’t sure why Brenton had allowed Ruby to lie to her, but it was possible that he wasn’t aware of how big a lie it was. And she knew he put his company first, which he’d been more than honest about. His loyalty to her was true, but secondary.

Over time, she might earn more of his trust, but she’d never equal that of a lifetime of alliances and memories, not when every company child was told to put them first, and no others. Perhaps she could have the second largest share of Brenton’s heart, and that would be enough.

As they drove home, Brenton got a message, which he ignored, but as soon as he parked the car, he pulled his phone to check it. “Work,” he said.

“I understand,” Rekka smiled at him to show she meant it, “My job has confidential information, too.”

“I’ll just be a minute,” Brenton promised, dropping a kiss on her cheek before stepping into his home office.

*    *    *

Life on the colony planet of Kaibou was going uneventfully until the second generation of colonists was born on the planet, at some, at a young age, began showing various psychic abilities. When those people, called marvels, grew up, many of them formed companies, building compounds to live in and raise their children.  Due to population diversity issues, many colonists have children using genetic bank material, or choose a succession of partners. Now on the seventh generation, marvels are born both within and without company walls, and all must work together to use their gifts and make a living on a still wild land. Some of these outsider marvels sign contracts with company marvels, agreeing to give them a child raised within the company, in return for a permanent home in the company compound, a stipend, and other concessions.


About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

33 responses »

  1. Kim Magennis says:

    This world and its social norms are very intriguing. Caitlin. I love being made to wonder. Excellent job.

  2. Ed Hoornaert says:

    What you have is great, as usual … but did you leave something out? Unless I’m mistaken, your snippet is one sentence long.

  3. She’s smart but not that smart. Something’s afoot and it’s not right. Good-way good snippet.

  4. daryldevore says:

    Intriguing about the secrets they’ve kept and what was the phone call – was it really work related?? Tweeted.

  5. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    So much tension building between the two of them. I wonder if she will ever voice how she feels to him. As always, I’m intrigued to read more. 🙂

  6. Things just don’t seem to be matching up here for them, with work and the other distractions someone (oh the author LOL) keeps throwing in their path! Another interesting snippet to keep us intrigued…

  7. Andrea R Huelsenbeck says:

    So sad that the best Rekka can hope for is being second in Brenton’s heart.

  8. jakerose says:

    Ooh they both have confidential jobs… I feel like that can cause a lot of tension and mistrust. Nice snippet!

  9. nancygideon says:

    Second best stinks! I hope he wises up and re-prioritizes!

  10. Kind of a harsh reality she seems willing to accept, at least so far.

  11. Carrie-Anne says:

    There’s a lot of potential drama brewing between them, even if they’re only supposed to have a contractual relationship. These kinds of things almost always tend to get complicated!

  12. E.D. Martin says:

    The book sounds interesting. Great job with the world building!

  13. Hmm, this might put some strain on their relationship…

  14. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    Intriguing snippet.

  15. Hywela Lyn says:

    I lvoe the way the tension is building here, great snippet!

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