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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2016, currently called River, Tree, Mountain. It’s science fiction, set on a colony planet, six generations in–with about 10% of the population born “marvels,” who have special abilities like dowsing, healing, or creating fire. The protagonist, Rekka, is a spark (fire), signed a contract with Brenton to provide him a child, moves in with him, and after Rekka tests and gets her results, she’s lied to, which Brenton doesn’t correct. He takes her home, and offers her a massage, which leads to most of her clothes coming off, then Rekka undoes his shirt and pants.




“You know, if I take these off, you’d me wearing more clothes than me. And I can see you’re very concerned with being equitable, so that won’t do,” Brenton said.

“You’re right, but there’s a very easy way to fix that,” Rekka slid her hands across his chest to his shoulders, and started sliding his shirt down his left arm.

“Yes?” Brenton shifted, allowing her to slide off his shirt, disentangling his other arm, and letting the garment fall to the floor.

“Mmm-hmm,” Rekka demonstrated, making Brenton laugh and pounce on her, so they collapsed back on the bed in a tangle of naked limbs. With all this new territory to explore, the laughter soon faded into other emotions.

He asked what she liked, and showed her where he liked to be touched, giving himself to her hands just as he asked her to trust in his. And the end result was wonderful, warm, with a few moments of laughter when they nearly slid off the side of the bed, or bumped their heads. When they both stretched out on the bed, sweating and trying to catch their breath, she felt they’d both acquitted themselves well in a memorable first time.

*    *    *

Life on the colony planet of Kaibou was going uneventfully until the second generation of colonists was born on the planet, at some, at a young age, began showing various psychic abilities. When those people, called marvels, grew up, many of them formed companies, building compounds to live in and raise their children.  Due to population diversity issues, many colonists have children using genetic bank material, or choose a succession of partners. Now on the seventh generation, marvels are born both within and without company walls, and all must work together to use their gifts and make a living on a still wild land. Some of these outsider marvels sign contracts with company marvels, agreeing to give them a child raised within the company, in return for a permanent home in the company compound, a stipend, and other concessions.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

34 responses »

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    This is starting out as a very promising relationship.

  2. What a charming engagement for the happy couple. You wrote this so well.

  3. Hywela Lyn says:

    This sounds like so much more than a business relationship! 🙂

  4. Nothing like getting to know one another.

  5. Well, all right then! I guess I can stop worrying about these two for at least a short time 🙂 Nice snippet!

  6. Well, things are heating up. Lol

  7. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    I love how playful the beginning of this snippet is, but I would have liked a little more emotion with the later part. It is possible without being graphic, but I felt like it was a missed opportunity for you.

    • I haven’t written many sex scenes, so I wasn’t sure how much detail to put in. Especially since they’re not in love–and Brenton has been quite clear he doesn’t intend to be.

      • Author Jessica E. Subject says:

        Just a suggestion, but what you could do is show her struggle with what she is feeling for him, maybe a growing connection with this intimacy, versus not wanting to become attached to a man who will never love her. It’s your story, so it’s totally up to you, but that could be a place to take it.

        • I tried to show that a little earlier in the scene, where they get home and instead of joining her on the sofa, he takes a phone call in his room.
          But maybe I can work it in again. I’ll think about it. Thanks for the suggestion! 🙂

  8. nancygideon says:

    What a wonderful scene, Caitlin. Equitable, indeed!

  9. I’d love to see this scene expanded! But I also like steamy romances. 😉 Regardless, it’s a good snippet. 😀

  10. Sue Barr says:

    I snickered at: ‘they both acquitted themselves well’. I’m going to tell my husband that tonight….. he he he

  11. Andrea R Huelsenbeck says:

    If I remember correctly, the last couple of snippets building up to this one were quite steamy, and I think the heat will carry over for the reader. You’ve crafted a satisfying scene without resorting to explicit details.

  12. Trin Carl says:

    “the laughter soon faded into other emotons,” Love it! Reminds me of every time I laughed way tooooo much.

  13. Things are looking good for them.

  14. You did a good job of walking the fine line between business and love. 🙂

  15. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    What a charming first time for them. I hope it only draws them closer.

  16. Alexis Duran says:

    Nicely done. A casual sex scene that isn’t somehow negative is hard to pull off, but you balanced it well.

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