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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2016, currently called River, Tree, Mountain. It’s science fiction, set on a colony planet, six generations in–with about 10% of the population born “marvels,” who have special abilities like dowsing, healing, or creating fire. The protagonist, Rekka, is a spark (fire), signed a contract with Brenton to provide him a child, moves in with him, and they make some progress on baby making. (I’ve skipped over several weeks of time since the last snippet.)
Rekka still didn’t feel like she knew much of Brenton—the basics of favorite foods, hobbies, and shows, yes. The bare statistics of his parents, siblings, and nieces and nephews, certainly.
But who he was as a person was a little more elusive. He was charming, and tender in the right moments, seemed honestly concerned with her happiness, funny, and sometimes a little awkward. She’d seen only the polished side of him, as if he wasn’t willing, yet, to show her his flaws. They hadn’t been living together long, she reminded herself, and put a smile on her face as she approached the apartment door.
When she opened the door, however, she heard Brenton’s voice, raised. The silences in his conversation meant he was on the phone.
She caught a snippet of conversation as he paced by his cracked open bedroom door, and worried she’d be eavesdropping if she let it go on much longer, she flipped on the screen.
Over the murmur of a talk show, she heard Brenton’s voice cut off, and then his door click shut.
* * *
Life on the colony planet of Kaibou was going uneventfully until the second generation of colonists was born on the planet, at some, at a young age, began showing various psychic abilities. When those people, called marvels, grew up, many of them formed companies, building compounds to live in and raise their children. Due to population diversity issues, many colonists have children using genetic bank material, or choose a succession of partners. Now on the seventh generation, marvels are born both within and without company walls, and all must work together to use their gifts and make a living on a still wild land. Some of these outsider marvels sign contracts with company marvels, agreeing to give them a child raised within the company, in return for a permanent home in the company compound, a stipend, and other concessions.
Oh, that would definitely make me uncomfortable and curious. I wonder what Rekka will do next.
I trimmed a bit for spoilers, but let’s just say the person on the other end isn’t a fan of Rekka. 😉
I admire her walking away and giving Brenton privacy. Still . . . Maybe she needs to listen more.
Eavesdropping can be dangerous–especially if you get caught at it!
Could be totally innocent, but I get the feeling it’s not. Great way to subtly build suspicion.
Brenton has closed Rekka out of his business plenty of times by this point. He draws some definite lines between them.
A bit left out, isn’t she? 😦
Indeed she is.
Hmmm. I wonder what’s going on–it doesn’t sound good.
It’s not great, for sure.
Annnd I’m back to not completely trusting this guy LOL. But the story sure is intriguing! Great snippet…
You have good instincts. 🙂
I think I’m as curious as she is – what was up with the call and why shut the door???
Tweeted.
Brenton has never invited her into his room–and he does all his work in there.
Uh oh. Lots of possibilities here. Who was on the phone?
A character you all haven’t met. 😉
Sounds like shell just have to get to know him better! 😉
If only he’d cooperate. 😉
Sure doesn’t sound good.
Now WHAT is that man talking about? I really want to know!
I couldn’t leave his dialogue in without a lot of explaining, so I cut it. But, he’s talking to someone he knows pretty well, and who does NOT like Rekka.
Thank you for cluing me in! I really was curious! One “problem” with snippets!
Yep, you have to condense a lot. But it’s still so cool to see a ‘window’ of someone’s work.
I totally agree with that! =D