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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2016, currently called River, Tree, Mountain. It’s science fiction, set on a colony planet, six generations in–with about 10% of the population born “marvels,” who have special abilities like dowsing, healing, or creating fire. The protagonist, Rekka, is a spark (fire), signed a contract with Brenton to provide him a child, moves in with him, and several weeks later, she overhears part of an angry phone conversation before he shuts the door–and goes to the park to paint, where she meets a pink-haired man.



“You’re done?” he asked, and his shoulders slumped, gaze fixed on her painting, then those violet eyes trained on her.

“Why, do you want me to paint you something? If it’s something quick…” Rekka placed a fresh sheet of paper on her board and offered an encouraging smile.

“How about me?”

“People are tough, just letting you know.” Rekka started with an outline of his face–a square chin, a straight, strong nose, and  eyebrows above deep-set eyes. She blended in gradients to indicate cheekbones and the coils of the ears, before tracing the sweep of his wavy hair, which was too tousled to capture completely, except in the sense of movement. A bit of mixing got the perfect pink to follow those lines, and then violet over the eyebrows and irises.

She added the start of a neck and shoulders, and pale blue in a rough oval behind the face for a little background, then she turned it so her audience of one could see his portrait.

*    *    *

Life on the colony planet of Kaibou was going uneventfully until the second generation of colonists was born on the planet, at some, at a young age, began showing various psychic abilities. When those people, called marvels, grew up, many of them formed companies, building compounds to live in and raise their children.  Due to population diversity issues, many colonists have children using genetic bank material, or choose a succession of partners. Now on the seventh generation, marvels are born both within and without company walls, and all must work together to use their gifts and make a living on a still wild land. Some of these outsider marvels sign contracts with company marvels, agreeing to give them a child raised within the company, in return for a permanent home in the company compound, a stipend, and other concessions.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

30 responses »

  1. This snippet is so charming, painting and all. Beautiful writing, Caitlin.

  2. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    I’m sure he’ll love it, but I’m even more curious about his role in the story.

  3. daryldevore says:

    Letting someone paint your portrait requires trust. Curious as to his reaction to it.

  4. Interesting that she’s willing to paint some random stranger. So I too wonder what his role in the story is going to be! Great snippet though, love the comments about painting…

  5. Sounds like she did an excellent job!

  6. Trin Carl says:

    Very descriptive piece. I like some of this backdrop as well very intriguing… Life on the colony planet of Kaibou was going uneventfully until the second generation of colonists was born on the planet.

  7. Alexis Duran says:

    I love getting the image of him this way. Like everyone else, I’m very curious about the role he’s going play.

  8. Diane Burton says:

    Each week, you make me want to know more. Excellent job.

  9. I’ve never been able to draw or paint well. I’m jealous!

    • I can do some passable flowers and such, but people are tough! I’m a bit jealous myself, but we can all live vicariously though our characters. (Just the good stuff.)

  10. Andrea R Huelsenbeck says:

    Oh, man. I want to see his reaction.

  11. nancygideon says:

    So wonderfully visual, Caitlin. You can feel her subtle attraction with every detail.

  12. Carrie-Anne says:

    I love the description of her creation process. I also wonder what his reaction will be.

  13. This is a great way to see what he looks like.

  14. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    Interesting snippet. Great visual. I’m curious to know if he will be important later on in the story.

  15. Sue Barr says:

    I wonder what part he’ll play in her future. Also, as an artist, she may ‘see’ something he wishes to hide. This could be interesting.

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