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This is a WIP, NaNoWriMo 2016, currently called River, Tree, Mountain. It’s science fiction, set on a colony planet, six generations in–with about 10% of the population born “marvels,” who have special abilities like dowsing, healing, or creating fire. The protagonist, Rekka, is a spark (fire), signed a contract with Brenton to provide him a child, moves in with him, and more than a year later, is outside painting when L, the pink haired man, shows up and gives her a hand carved wood goldfinch, saying “It reminds me of you.”





He must’ve read the surprise on Rekka’s face, because L swiped his hand through the air as if to erase what he’d said. “Not the coloring, of course, or that you’re a bird, because you’re not, but… you made me something, and I thought I should make you something, too…”

“It’s lovely, really,” Rekka reassured, “but it must’ve been much more work than my painting.”

“I travel a lot, and sometimes you’re stuck somewhere with nothing to do, so I make these out of scraps,” he waved his hand again, slower, dismissing his efforts.

“And I’m like a goldfinch,” Rekka prompted.

“Bright, inquisitive, and chirpy, yeah,” he said, without hesitation, having abruptly gotten over whatever troubled him.

“Chirpy,” Rekka repeated, considering if she wanted to accept the word. There was, she decided, a certain cheerfulness to her nature, and a definite willingness to peck at people when it amused her.

“I’m touched you thought of me, L. Were you headed somewhere?”

*    *    *

Life on the colony planet of Kaibou was going uneventfully until the second generation of colonists was born on the planet, at some, at a young age, began showing various psychic abilities. When those people, called marvels, grew up, many of them formed companies, building compounds to live in and raise their children.  Due to population diversity issues, many colonists have children using genetic bank material, or choose a succession of partners. Now on the seventh generation, marvels are born both within and without company walls, and all must work together to use their gifts and make a living on a still wild land. Some of these outsider marvels sign contracts with company marvels, agreeing to give them a child raised within the company, in return for a permanent home in the company compound, a stipend, and other concessions.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

31 responses »

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Considering that she’s ‘married’ and, from what you’ve shown us before, happily, I’m really curious where the L he’s going in this tale.

  2. I wonder also. And this L is so much more interesting. And she perked right up so nicely.

  3. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Great snippet! I wonder if her question will lead to the answer we’re all waiting for. 🙂

  4. Jenna Jaxon says:

    She certainly seemed animated as they talked. How long is her contract with Brenton? Is it only to give him a child, or is it more like a marriage? Because if it is, I smell trouble in L. Great snippet.

    • I skipped over a bunch of less interesting explanation, but the contract is to have a child, and be part of raising it. It’s not much like a marriage at all.
      For example, Brenton has a daughter a few years older, who lives with her mother in the city.

  5. nancygideon says:

    Love this sweet interlude . . . and like him much better than Brenton! I think she may, too.

  6. She does seem like a better match with him than Brenton. I find it very odd this guy shows up after a YEAR, with this gift, etc. But intriguing. Great snippet!

  7. daryldevore says:

    Chirpy – yes that’s a word you would have to try out and see if it fits.Tweeted.

  8. Aw, this scene is so sweet!

  9. I love everything about this. Such a tender exchange.

  10. Alexis Duran says:

    Chirpy, eh? Well, she didn’t seem to mind it. Wonder where this budding friendship will lead them?

  11. Hywela Lyn says:

    Hmm – there’s a definite chemstry between these two isn’t there! I see trouble brewing though.

  12. Andrea R Huelsenbeck says:

    I like Brenton so much and the chemistry between him and Rekka. I don’t want L to mess up their relationship.

  13. Carrie-Anne says:

    That’s a lovely gift. I also wonder if there might be some kind of romantic possibilities for them, or just temptation.

  14. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    I’m curious about L also. Interesting development.

  15. Diane Burton says:

    Her marriage certainly confines them to an easy friendship. Or maybe not so easy. It raises many questions, chief of which is will she leave Brenton or go with L?

  16. I’m rum about L also. It’s not much like a marriage ceremony at all.

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