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Here’s a WIP from NaNoWriMo 2017, currently titled King Under the Mountain. Set in Casper, Wyoming, in a world where goblins trade in magical goods with humans, traveling from their world to ours through stone circle gates. But if humans aren’t wary in their dealings with goblins, they can find themselves stolen away! Stephanie and Alix, cousins, are biking home from a party, a bit drunk, when Alix falls off her bike and throws up.





“You feeling better?” Stephanie asked, when the retching had stopped for a while, and released her cousin’s hair with a final pat on her back.

Grumbling a noise that vaguely resembled agreement, Alix stood slowly, and when the world—and her stomach—didn’t revolt, rummaged in her backpack for a stick of gum.  Rubbing tears out of her blue eyes, she kicked leaves and dirt over the mess she’d left, then hunted for her cousin.

“We should—” she began, but Stephanie cut her off with a laugh.

“Enough should for right now! I’m going to stretch my legs a bit, come on!” She started walking, scuffing her feet though the fallen leaves, her stride wavering from side to side.

“Steph, get back here!” Alix demanded, then regretted it when Stephanie tossed her head, curled sandy blonde hair flying around her face, and took off running through the trees.

“Don’t be a spoilsport!” Stephanie’s voice floated behind her, followed by a few more giggles, and crunching leaves.

*    *    *

I took inspiration from “The Ballad of Tam Lin,” and Christina Rosetti’s “Goblin Market.” The idea of people being stolen away, and a loved one journeying to get them back (though Tam Lin was stolen by the Queen of the fairies), and the bustling goblin markets with their dangerous fruit from Rosetti’s poem sparked this adventure. Alix and Stephanie are college freshman, 18 and 19 respectively, and cousins sharing a dorm room. They have just left an off-campus party where they did some drinking, and are biking back to the dorms in the evening.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

24 responses »

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    Something tells me this bit of drunken bravado won’t end well.

  2. Jess Schira says:

    I agree with Ed. They’re going to regret their actions, probably sooner as opposed to later. Good, solid snippet, Caitlin.

  3. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Uh oh! I’m worried for them both. I feel a sense of dread reading this snippet.

  4. nancygideon says:

    Those who don’t listen run straight into trouble!!

  5. Uh oh, I’m sure there’s major trouble ahead now! Fascinating story, enjoyed the excerpt…

  6. daryldevore says:

    Ooh – running off after heaving might not be such a good idea. Tweeted.

  7. This won’t end well, haha. 😀

  8. Botanist says:

    Oh, yes, I remember those days … 🙂

  9. Hywela Lyn says:

    Oh dear, this isn’t going to end well is it. Love the understated sense of impending doom!

  10. Sounds like they need one another. Great snippet.

  11. elainecsc2013 says:

    I see trouble coming.

  12. Diane Burton says:

    I’m waiting for something (or someone) bad to pop up.

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