This 8-10 sentence blog hop is hosted by The Weekend Writing Warriors. (Click the link for the list of participants, or rules if you want to join!)

Here’s a WIP from NaNoWriMo 2017, currently titled King Under the Mountain. Set in Casper, Wyoming, in a world where goblins trade in magical goods with humans, traveling from their world to ours through stone circle gates. But if humans aren’t wary in their dealings with goblins, they can find themselves stolen away! Stephanie and Alix, cousins, are biking home from a party, a bit drunk, when Alix falls off her bike and throws up.

weekend_writing_warriorsveteransbadge

Luckily, her cousin left an obvious trail even in the rapidly darkening shadows, so it only took a few moments for Alix to catch sight of the sequin-decorated cream cardigan Stephanie wore.

Stephanie heard her, and ran faster, dodging past tree branches and shrubs, and then she broke out into a clearing.

Hot on her heels, Alix didn’t spot the danger until it was too late. The first thing she noticed was Stephanie skidding to a stop, and whipping around to face her. Then the moonlight spilling over Stephanie’s face, highlighting how her eyes widened in terror.

A cold wind knifed through the clearing, carrying whispering voices speaking in an unknown language, and raising new tears in Alix’s eyes. She blinked them away furiously, the pale figure of her cousin wavering in front of her.

Then Stephanie was gone.

Heart racing, Alix moved closer, cautiously, until she could see the truth too clearly to dismiss it. The clearing stood empty of anyone but her, and the only sign of what had happened was a ring of toadstools dotting the grass.

*    *    *

I took inspiration from “The Ballad of Tam Lin,” and Christina Rosetti’s “Goblin Market.” The idea of people being stolen away, and a loved one journeying to get them back (though Tam Lin was stolen by the Queen of the fairies), and the bustling goblin markets with their dangerous fruit from Rosetti’s poem sparked this adventure. Alix and Stephanie are college freshman, 18 and 19 respectively, and cousins sharing a dorm room. They have just left an off-campus party where they did some drinking, and are biking back to the dorms in the evening.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

21 responses »

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    What a spooky abduction scene!

  2. Your writing is extraordinary, Caitlin. I enjoyed every spooky moment. Happy Holidays, my friend.

  3. Yikes- that was both creepy and scary. Well done!

  4. nancygideon says:

    Wonderfully visual, Caitlin. You can picture and feel every detail. Can’t wait to read more. (Love the part about the toadstools!).

  5. daryldevore says:

    Ring of toadstools – it’s the little things that make it so good. Tweeted.

  6. Wow, powerful scene indeed! I can’t wait to see what happens next…great snippet.

  7. Eden says:

    Nice… well, not so “nice” but definitely easy to visualize. Dang!

  8. Oooo This was a great kidnapping scene!

  9. Lyn Perry says:

    Oh no! Nice set up and well done.

  10. Carrie-Anne says:

    That’s a creepy sight indeed!

  11. Diane Burton says:

    Creepy, spooky, mysterious. It sure is. Great description.

What are your thoughts?

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out /  Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s

This site uses Akismet to reduce spam. Learn how your comment data is processed.