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Here’s a new WIP–“Discovering Gremlins.” Seth had a bad day at work–hit his head and saw a monster, which he dismissed as his imagination, despite a shadow following him home. The next day, he breaks his phone screen, his shower sprays water everywhere, the subway car he’s on is delayed more than an hour–after lunch Harry (she of I.T. fame) pushes him into her office and tells him she can fix his gremlin problem.

Previous snippet: Harry flopped into a rolling chair with a sigh, the wheels squeaking across the linoleum. “So, Seth, how did you tick off the gremlins?”

He frowned at her, then asked, “What?”

“Ugly tech monsters? Making everything around you break?” she prompted in the patient tone of a teacher with an exceptionally slow pupil.

“I didn’t—it wasn’t real,” Seth said. “That thing with the teeth, and the spikes, and the claws can’t have been real.”

Harry’s lips pressed into a grim line, “Yeah, it was real, and we need to get them off your back, before they kill you.”

“Before they—what?”

“Don’t worry,” Harry told him,.“I know what to do.”




She pulled out a notepad, and started scribbling on it, “You need something big–something flashy. Here’s the address, and the specs you need.”

Harry paused in her writing, and jabbed the end of her pen at him, “Don’t skimp. They know the difference, and if you offend them with your apology, you don’t get a second chance.” She wrote a few more words, then tore the page off the pad, holding it out to him.

He took it, bemused.

“Say you’re sick, lunch didn’t agree with you. Buy this, take it home, but don’t go inside until I show up.”

“What are you talking about?” Seth burst out, feeling ready to rip his hair out, or shake Harry until she started making sense.

*    *    *

Gremlins have camouflage magic, and a way of making people who catch just a glimpse forget them. This is good for humanity, because they’re powerfully ugly, and react violently to being discovered. But when Seth hits his head and lands on the floor right next to a gremlin, he sees it… and it notices that he’s done so. Things are about to go downhill for Seth.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

23 responses »

  1. Ed Hoornaert says:

    If this woman works on the computer help desk, she deserves a big. A big one.

  2. She’s about to save him IF he follows directions. Does a guy really pay attention?
    Another terrific snippet, Caitlin.

  3. Harry’s making sense to me anyway! Wonder what she told him to buy and how she knows all this and….it’s really a terrific story that has the reader positively begging to read more. Great snippet!

  4. Alexis Duran says:

    What a relief…once he accepts what she’s telling him, anyway. Hope he doesn’t muck it up!

  5. SueBarr says:

    I like
    ‘Don’t skimp. They know the difference.’ Much like a gift from an old boyfriend, ‘Real gold, you say? Hmmm…..’

  6. Hywela Lyn says:

    Good job Harry knows what to do – but I can’t help wondering HOW she knows. I want to know what’s on that list in case I ever need it! 🙂

  7. Well, those instructions are VERY specific! Hope he can follow them.

  8. Carrie-Anne says:

    I have a feeling the gremlin won’t let up on him easily, even if he follows these directions exactly!

  9. I LOVE that someone else is aware and confirms that they’re real!

  10. Diane Burton says:

    Ditto what Teresa said. Poor guy thinks he’s losing his mind. Now he knows different. I’m enjoying this wip.

  11. Eeek, the poor guy needs a break!

  12. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    I feel so sorry for him. It’s great that he now knows he isn’t losing his mind.

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