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Here’s a new WIP–“Discovering Gremlins.” Seth had a bad day at work–hit his head and saw a monster, which he dismissed as his imagination, despite a shadow following him home. The next day, he breaks his phone screen, his shower sprays water everywhere, the subway car he’s on is delayed more than an hour–after lunch Harry (she of I.T. fame) pushes him into her office and tells him she can fix his gremlin problem–and sends him to buy an expensive sound system, then wait for her before he enters his apartment. Seth goes in alone.

Previous snippet:

The noises had stopped, but he could hear, faintly, the whoosh of something breathing, right behind him. Small, sharp points pressed into his back, digging into his shoulders into two arcs—claws, he realized, as they just broke the skin.

A warning.

He could still hear the breathing, and the beginnings of a growl, and behind him, something else, bigger, moving closer.

He clenched his eyes shut. They wanted him to look at them. Why? He didn’t know, but his gut told him he shouldn’t open his eyes.

Through the spike of panic clogging his throat, he forced out, “I’m sorry,”and truly meant it this time.

The louder gremlin giggled, high-pitched and raspy.


This was it. This was how he died.

The heat from the claws digging into his back vanished, and as he knelt there, eyes clamped shut tightly, he heard the faint rustle of something—several somethings moving behind him.

Four, five… he couldn’t tell. Much more than two, which had been terrifying enough.

The door thudded against the wall as someone shoved it open, and a familiar voice shouted something in a language full of liquid syllables.

“Harry,” Seth said, as his frazzled brain provided him with a prosaic piece   of information amid the screaming terror of the last few minutes.

“Just stay put, Seth. Keep your eyes closed until I say otherwise,” Harry slid in between the lilting words of that other language.

A rough-edged voice, with an inhumanely deep tone, answered, the burble of sounds still as pretty as a stream, answered, moving away from Seth as it did so.

*    *    *

Gremlins have camouflage magic, and a way of making people who catch just a glimpse forget them. This is good for humanity, because they’re powerfully ugly, and react violently to being discovered. But when Seth hits his head and lands on the floor right next to a gremlin, he sees it… and it notices that he’s done so. Things are about to go downhill for Seth.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

25 responses »

  1. Author Jessica E. Subject says:

    Hmm, how does Harry know so much about the Gremlins, including their language? Very interesting!

  2. You always leave us in suspense. Another exciting snippet!

  3. OK, WOW. You really amped up the stress here, having him surrounded by maybe as many as five gremlins! Good thing he kept his eyes shut (although I’m dying to know why he needed to) and I want to know all about Harry! Great excerpt…

  4. Well he didn’t die, so that’s a step up from the most of his day… right?

  5. nancygideon says:

    Harry has me so intrigued. She’s got a story!!

  6. daryldevore says:

    The line starting – rough edged voice – great line! Tweeted.

  7. Elaine Cantrell says:

    Lots of emotion here! Sounds like Seth was barely saved.

  8. Ed Hoornaert says:

    The cavalry to the rescue!

  9. Diane Burton says:

    Poor Seth. He has to be scared to death. If the Gremlins doesn’t get him, the fright will. Good snippet.

  10. Carrie-Anne says:

    That is the stuff of nightmares!

  11. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    Harry is the best. Harry does know a lot about these gremlins. I’m curious to know how.

  12. Really, does IT have to do EVERYTHING? I was shaking in my boots right along with Seth!

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