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Shield of Namarr is a sword-and-sorcerer type fantasy WIP, set in a kingdom that suffers from magically-created, vicious creatures. Three friends bought a finding-things-lost potion, and set out to track down a stolen magical stone–they have found a river they must ride across, one at a time, with a rope around their waist in case of daggerfish attack, and Auber is the last to cross.

UPDATE: Miscounted and published on the wrong day, fixed now, sorry!


Auber urged the big gelding into the river, Nemesis snorting and tossing his head before charging into the water with enthusiasm, making the river churn and froth as he plunged across it.

“It’s not a race!” Shan yelled, watching the fighter’s rapid and noisy progress with concern.

“What?” Auber yelled, leaning forward as the gelding surged into the deepest part of the river.

“Not a race!” Shan repeated, louder.

“Don’t be jealous of my—” Auber wobbled as something smacked into Nemesis, sending the big animal stumbling.

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NOTE:  I’m having a hard time deciding on horse names, but the “the horse”s were driving me crazy, so they’re currently going to be called Nemesis, Blaze, and Sandy.

Originally, Shield of Namarr was intended to be a very short snippet, but some things I wrote at the end raised some questions–which led to more story. I’m currently working on some world-building and character development so I can figure out where the story goes next.

Shan, Auber, and Reagan visit a Stonespeller, a mage who works mostly in animated stone, to buy a potion that will help them recover a lost stone, the Shield of Namarr, which powers a shield that keeps magically-created, dangerous creatures from entering the city they live in. Failure to return the Shield quickly will have deadly consequences for their friend,  Jamie, whose life-force is currently powering the shield-spell.

About Caitlin Stern

I have a MA in English, and have so many fantasy/urban fantasy WIPs it's not even funny. I'm an avid reader of science fiction, fantasy, mystery, romance, biography, fiction, and anything else that catches my interest. I collect books, and bookmarks I find that are visually appealing and useful.

24 responses »

  1. Sarah W says:

    Karma is a beautiful thing to behold, especially when she tosses a banana peel at someone else’s ego. 🙂

    I know it’s a dangerous moment, too, but still funny!

  2. Elsa Holland says:

    Wow, loved the immediacy you have here. The tension is great.

  3. Frank Fisher says:

    Whatever hit Nemesis at the end was quite sudden – I didn’t expect it, which is good. I like the names you’ve picked for the horses. I say keep ’em.

  4. Carrie-Anne says:

    Nemesis is a neat horse name. I hope they’re able to get away from whatever or whomever hit him.

  5. Joyce says:

    He got his. I love the details, especially from the first paragraph. Well done!

  6. chellecordero says:

    I just knew something was going to happen to the rider and his horse, I wonder if the horse’s churning of the water attracted some underwater creature and if so how bad this is going to get.
    I love the horses’ names.

    • caitlinstern says:

      This is actually what Auber figured, and why the argument didn’t go on longer. The noise from all the horses, one after the other, meant the longer a predator had to be attracted.

  7. Gemma Parkes says:

    Ha, gotta love that stumble!

  8. Oh-oh! I hope Nemesis will be fine;).
    Great tension that left me desperate to find out what happens next. Well done.

  9. Is the deep spot swimming depth?

    • caitlinstern says:

      Yep. I took out a sentence that says the gelding is swimming–a few steps after the shorter mares started to do so–to make the count. I probably should have squeezed a phrase in there, though…

  10. Millie Burns says:

    I love the name Nemesis! And uh-oh…spaghetti-o. Someone is in trouble…loved the snippet again this week : )

  11. Evelyn Jules says:

    Gah! Please don’t let it be a giant daggerfish! I’m terrified of those things based on the name alone. Speaking of names, I think the horse names you have are fantastic! 🙂

    • caitlinstern says:

      Oh, daggerfish aren’t that bad. They’re just magically created chimera, let loose to spawn in the rivers. 😉

      Everyone seems to like them so far, so they’ll probably stay. I found a racehorse named Vindication, and thought ‘that’s a great name. I need something like that for my warhorse!’

  12. Alexis Duran says:

    Great snippet! Vivid details, tight action and a cliff-hanger, all rolled into eight. Nice work. PS I really like the name Nemesis. I almost named my cat that.

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